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Jake Cruise Director Posts: 274 |
posted 01-20-1999 10:58 PM
I have two poems which I was told I had to post by those in the chat room on 1-20-99. So, Here I am. My second post, and now it's my most favorite hobby, next to HLs of course, my writing. "Split Rock" The guiding light shines bright, As Two Harbors gets busier, As majestic as the Lake itself, "Split Rock II" In 1910, Orrin Pete Young, The day of the lighthouse service had died In 1969, Both originals. By Jake. |
Polly Cruise Director Posts: 234 |
posted 01-20-1999 11:18 PM
Thanks for sharing your poems Jake. We love HLs Split Rock & regret missing it (the real thing)when we were so close, Duluth, last summer. (We were expected to see family not Lighthouses.) Keep writing and we may be reading you in the Legacy! [This message has been edited by Polly (edited 01-20-99).] |
JTimothyA Saint Posts: 1266 |
posted 01-21-1999 01:02 AM
quote: Young Jake, I'm heartened by the joy in your post. Clarity in writing reflects clarity of thought. Hold fast to your enthusiasm for the written word. All the best,
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Jake Cruise Director Posts: 274 |
posted 01-21-1999 09:56 PM
I have two more poems which I wrote while I was waiting for the music teacher to get all done yelling at some kids in the hall. "Fresnel" Radiant beams, As the light flashes, Of passion, As the jewel shines, "Thomas Point" Upon steel legs, Everyone knows it, Although land, For Thomas Point, [This message has been edited by Jake (edited 01-23-99).] |
Art Cruise Director Posts: 1387 |
posted 01-21-1999 10:26 PM
Images conjured, Jake! I can only reiterate Tim's hope that you keep your love of writing for the rest of your life. Don't allow anything to change that. Tim, very well said. -Art |
tnkeeper WACKO Posts: 86 |
posted 01-21-1999 11:03 PM
Jake your poem is wonderful! Look forward to reading more from you.
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mombo Cruise Director Posts: 1604 |
posted 01-21-1999 11:14 PM
Great effort Jake! I do poems on occasion too. Did one for my daughter's college graduation (B.U.) and also for my son's (West Point). Will have to do a lighthouse now, I guess. Keep up the good work and save the last dance for me.... |
Bob St Clair WACKO Posts: 202 |
posted 01-22-1999 07:47 AM
Jake Enjoyed reading your work, keep it up. Mombo would love to read what you have written reference your daughter and son graduation. Bob
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Jake Cruise Director Posts: 274 |
posted 01-24-1999 10:30 PM
Thank you all that have responded, and all that will respond. I appreciate it! |
RFoster WACKO Posts: 388 |
posted 01-25-1999 12:54 AM
I enjoy your poems Jake. Look forward to seeing more in the future. Where did you get the talent? Ron |
JChidester Saint Posts: 3167 |
posted 01-25-1999 01:04 AM
Well Done, Jake! I've encouraged him to submit his lighthouse poems to HL for a future Legacy. I'm also awaiting some of Jake's photos for a 'Gallery'. For those who don't know him, Jake is a relatively new collector and a welcome regular at our weekly chats. On those nights he gets to stay up late to participate. 'Jake' will turn 15 on Feb 1. The cat's out of the bag now, Jake. Let's see how much email you get: Fresnel10@aol.com [This message has been edited by JChidester (edited 01-25-99).] |
Art Cruise Director Posts: 1387 |
posted 01-25-1999 07:53 AM
For those of you who were early readers of this thread, please note that Jake has edited his 1/21/99 9:56 p.m. post. In editing, he has added two additional poems. Also John, I think Jake will be 14 on 2/1/99, not 15. |
Jake Cruise Director Posts: 274 |
posted 01-25-1999 05:37 PM
Just to set everything right, my 14th birthday is on 2-1-99. |
JChidester Saint Posts: 3167 |
posted 01-25-1999 06:58 PM
Sorry about the age error - heaven knows we can all wait till we turn older! Hope you have a great one! |
Jake Cruise Director Posts: 274 |
posted 01-25-1999 07:06 PM
Thanks, John. That's OK. You were only a year off! |
RFoster WACKO Posts: 388 |
posted 01-25-1999 08:26 PM
Jake, Sometimes you have to "humor" the older folks (like John). We're all thankful that he was only one number off in the right digit and not the left digit of your age (hate to skip ten years worth of fun, "24"). He also could have transposed the numbers and you would have been much older (say 41??). Hope that you have a wonderful birthday, Jake, and keep those poems coming. Ron |
RFoster WACKO Posts: 388 |
posted 01-25-1999 08:29 PM
oops [This message has been edited by RFoster (edited 01-27-99).] |
theShadow unregistered Posts: 388 |
posted 01-25-1999 10:33 PM
Quote 'Sometimes you have to "humor" the older folks.' End quote Love it John. [This message has been edited by theShadow (edited 01-25-99).] |
LamarB Cruise Director Posts: 900 |
posted 01-25-1999 11:21 PM
Jake, you're an excellent poet. Keep up the good work. I hope to see more of your liteary artistry in the near future. I really enjoy it. ------------------
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Todd Shorkey WACKO Posts: 805 |
posted 01-26-1999 09:40 AM
Jake, I truly enjoyed your poems. I just want to say "thank you" for sharing them with all of us. Keep up the great work! -Todd |
HCarpenter WACKO Posts: 74 |
posted 01-26-1999 07:43 PM
Of course John is never 1 off if it relates to the number that is on the flag of his latest HL acquistion. |
Kat WACKO Posts: 162 |
posted 01-26-1999 08:16 PM
Jake, All of your poems are beautiful!! You are a very talented young man, and proud to say a fellow Hoosier! I have enjoyed getting to know you by chatting with you, I hope some day I am fortunate enough to meet such a bright and shining beacon of youth. I wish a very Happy Birthday! Sincerely, Kat {=^+^=} |
Robert M Dick WACKO Posts: 423 |
posted 01-27-1999 01:27 PM
Jake, Poetry is the true form of expression. It ebbs and flows just like the tide Why don't you and I work on creating a Christmas rhyme comparing our favorite lighthouses and candles of the season. Freedom of expressing ones self is what this nation was founded on. Lighthouses kept her shores safe for those who ventured here. Keep the flame ------------------ |
engbrady Saint Posts: 1348 |
posted 01-27-1999 02:00 PM
While I can't write poems, I can read them and this has always been a favorite of mine.
Even at this distance I can see the tides, And as the evening darkens, lo! how bright, No one alone: from each projecting cape Like the great giant Christopher it stands And the great ships sail outward and return They come forth from the darkness, and their sails The mariner remembers when a child, Steadfast, serene, immovable, the same, It sees the ocean to its bosom clasp The startled waves leap over it; the storm The sea-bird wheeling round it, with the din A new Prometheus, chained upon the rock, "Sail on!" it says: "sail on, ye stately ships! -The Lighthouse- |
Jake Cruise Director Posts: 274 |
posted 03-11-1999 09:50 PM
"Cape Agulhaus Light" Shining bright, Now, IMHO, I think that this needs much more work. So, if anyone out there has any suggestions, feel free. I will give all of them consideration. I will try to post the finished, more updated product. Thanks. Jake (Stephen) |
tnkeeper WACKO Posts: 86 |
posted 03-11-1999 10:11 PM
Stephen, I'm no literary expert, but I like your poem as it is. Thank you for sharing this with us. Debbie |
JChidester Saint Posts: 3167 |
posted 03-11-1999 11:09 PM
OK, you asked...
With bands of red and bands of white It marks the way around the Cape. Unfurled for the wind to fill, Guiding ships through their plight,
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mombo Cruise Director Posts: 1604 |
posted 03-12-1999 12:16 AM
Nice thoughts Jake, but a few too many "ights"? I like my poems to rhyme so I jot down significant words and then try to think up words that rhyme with them. If that doesn't work I alter the first ones and try again. Sometimes I'm lucky and the r"ight" words just roll r"ight" out! |
jakescol Cruise Director Posts: 208 |
posted 03-12-1999 12:29 PM
Here's one There was a lightkeeper from Norway |
JTimothyA Saint Posts: 1266 |
posted 03-13-1999 01:37 AM
shouldn't that last line be something like: "Now he stands on his hands by the shoreway."
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JChidester Saint Posts: 3167 |
posted 03-13-1999 10:56 AM
There was a young man named Fred. Whose versus could never be read. When I asked him "Why" He'd always reply: "Oh, I don't know I guess it's because I try to squeeze too many words into the last line."
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mombo Cruise Director Posts: 1604 |
posted 03-13-1999 11:23 PM
John, the meter maid is going to get you big time for that one! |
JTimothyA Saint Posts: 1266 |
posted 03-14-1999 10:57 PM
nah, sainthood means never having to iambic pentameter Rgds, |
Jake Cruise Director Posts: 274 |
posted 03-23-1999 06:24 PM
I have another new one. This one has to be the best, in my opinion, by far. "Lighthouse Chronical" From the noble cliff, The light shines again, And that is a night, An Original By Stephen S. [This message has been edited by Jake (edited 03-24-99).] |
mombo Cruise Director Posts: 1604 |
posted 03-23-1999 08:18 PM
Very good Stephen! I would substitute "Behold me" for "Beware me". Also "And back into the wind he goes" rather than "goes he". Seems too close to your next "cozy". |
LamarB Cruise Director Posts: 900 |
posted 03-23-1999 10:07 PM
EXCELLENT Stephen! I agree it's your best I've read so far. I love the image it skillfully crafts on the canvas of my mind. Keep it up. You're good! ------------------
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tnkeeper WACKO Posts: 86 |
posted 03-25-1999 11:17 PM
I agree Stephen, this one is your best so far. Makes me that much more eager to read more of your work. Don't keep your fans waiting too long. Debbie |
Jake Cruise Director Posts: 274 |
posted 08-23-1999 11:34 AM
Hi all, I have come up with yet another poem. I feel like I've done more digging than Digger does just to find this post! Well, here goes... "The Pillar of Fire" The cliff stands tall against the sea, The navigator on board that ship, Then he sees the flame's light, This is the noble lighthouse, An original by Stephen S. Please feel free to post any opinions or suggestions. Thanks. Jakers |
Gravedigger WACKO Posts: 579 |
posted 08-23-1999 05:19 PM
Really, really cool Jake! Keep them coming. How 'bout some "underground" poems by Jake Allen Poe? |
mombo Cruise Director Posts: 1604 |
posted 08-24-1999 01:53 PM
And I thought you were just goofing off this summer, Jake! Very nice! That Legacy has got to clom onto one of these pretty soon. Digger, only you can write the underground stuff, God help us! MOMBO |
LamarB Cruise Director Posts: 900 |
posted 08-24-1999 04:15 PM
Good going Jake. I encourage you to keep writing. |
DonnaJLM WACKO Posts: 69 |
posted 08-25-1999 12:30 PM
Jake, This would be a wonderful poem for HL to include with a lighthouse like Whitefish Point (whenever they make it!) Donna |
QC WACKO Posts: 177 |
posted 08-25-1999 02:44 PM
Jake I really like "The Pillar of Fire". I think many of us lighthouse people feel the strength or guidance or safety or whatever it is we feel from lighthouses. The poem tells what that whatever is, great work. Thanks, take care QC |
DALE LAWRENCE WACKO Posts: 405 |
posted 08-30-1999 07:36 PM
Outstanding job Jake, keep them coming. Makes me want to take another trip to see more lights. Dale |
Jake Cruise Director Posts: 274 |
posted 10-15-1999 07:56 AM
OK. Yet another poem. I had to write this for an assignment at school. "Legacy of ALexandria" A light flashes through the night, Original by: Stephen Sostaric (c) |
foghornkeeper WACKO Posts: 63 |
posted 10-15-1999 11:45 PM
Thank you for your wonderful poetry. I just wish that I could write poetry. You have a GOD given talent, cherish it and polish it and keep it coming. I had missed seeing this thread before now and am glad you posted today. Now I know somone else who has the same birthday as I do(Feb 1). Happy 15th Birthday ( a quarter of a year in advance). fohornkeeper |
LamarB Cruise Director Posts: 900 |
posted 10-16-1999 10:10 AM
VERY nice Stephen. Thanks for sharing the products of your talent. Keep it coming. |
Joanne Cruise Director Posts: 866 |
posted 10-16-1999 10:29 AM
Stephen, One day I'm going to be able to tell people that "I knew him when....". You are very talented, there are great things ahead of you. Joanne |
youngone WACKO Posts: 137 |
posted 10-20-1999 12:17 AM
Great work Jake. I enjoyed all but the Thomas Point gives me a great view of the light. Keep the images flowing. |
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